Name : Rajudin
SRN : 1401121008
Subject : Writing II
Class : C
Arboretum
One of the best places to visit in central kalimantan is arboretum. Arboretum is a place for observation orangutan. This place built for observation orangutan and save them from poachers. Arboretum is not just as a place for observation orangutan, but also for observation plants. Arboretum was built in 1988 years ago by Palangkaraya government. Location of Arboretum is in Km 28. People can go to there by bus, car, motorcycle, etc. Usually people visited that place for see orangutan and have picnic with their family. That place full with trees and wood bridge. It makes the situation being enjoyable and very quiet. When i there my feel really relaxed. Arboretum is one of the places to visit in central kalimantan, because we not just can have picnic and relax there, but also can study about orangutan.
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BalasHapusIn concluding sentence,i think it's soo long and hard to get the point. You can use "Arboretum is a good place to study about Orangutan in Central Kalimantan".
I agree with ein. your concluding sentence very long and difficult to get the point. You can use '' Arboretum is good place to visit and study about Orangutan in Central Kalimantan.'' And you need to edit before you publish it.
BalasHapusI agree with ein. your concluding sentence very long and difficult to get the point. You can use '' Arboretum is good place to visit and study about Orangutan in Central Kalimantan.'' And you need to edit before you publish it.
BalasHapusI suggest you to change your paragraph in justify, it is better than before. Do you remember about the features of a paragraph ? I think you know about it. Let's discuss it to remind you. The first, one of the features of paragraph is the first line of a paragraph is indented. You must move the first line your paragraph to the right about a half of an inch. On word processor, this is about six spaces or the first tab stop position. Second, the last sentence or concluding sentence, brings the paragraph to a logical conclusion. The concluding sentence states the main point point afain or summaries the main idea of the paragraph. In addition, it can a suggestion, an opinion, or an prediction. Sometimes we use end of paragraph signals as follows : in conclusion, in summary, in brief, to conclude, etc. I think for your concluding sentence same with Ein's opinion. A good paragraph should have unity and coherence. It is can to helps the reader understand the paragraph.
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